hey what about this?

I wrote this the other day:

Violence

…day the man buried his family and neighbors in the sand and promised his revenge. One day later he found the ones who would help him and was strapped with bombs across his chest. A detonator was placed in his hand. They pointed him the way to the public square and told him the best time of day. Before he died he praised his god and cursed his enemy. Few heard him, but one man that did picked himself off the ground and shook the gravel and dust from his clothes. The very next…